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June 7, 2007
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The first chapter to my second volume. We'll see how this goes. Opening up last time was easy. A lot of the entire
volume was all about introducing everything. Melfina, Stark, Luna, West Luna, the surrounding area, etc. This time
that's all set.
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My first attempt at writing the opening paragraph was the most boring thing you could ever read.
A new day dawns, and Melfina goes about life as normal. She was rich. She had never been rich before. Yet her life
isn't normal anymore. Melfina is a scribe who spends the time not needed to run her shop constantly reading and
researching and trying to understand her craft. Yet she runs through the motions cause this is what she does.
Of course that was an early draft. My first run through usually is a lot of plainly stating what I want said or the
feeling the chapter is supposed to give off, but not matter how I refined this, it would still have been boring.
This was definitely a case of "Show. Don't tell." Start off with some yelling! Worked well for the first volume.
Just get right down to it. Melfina's being a bum, so it would be stupid to try to get her thoughts out about what's
happened to her, unless I was aiming to be borning for some reason. So take one of her friends and let her
friend express how she feels about Melfina.
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The document is also another case of how missing notes affects my work. My first thoughts on what Melfina's notes
on the book she wants to write were much better. But I didn't have a note book with me to write it down, and I
didn't even take the notes down in my Treo. I think I was driving or something. This came out alright, but I know
my initial reaction was better.
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