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January 7, 2008
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The chapter is up a little bit late, but it's still the 7th. I went to a conference, and didn't finish the final
draft before leaving, so I had to work on it again after I got back.
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Chapter X also recieved 79 views over at the White Stagg Inn. That's double what Chapter IX got, so even if part
of the reason might be simply the health of chapter, doubling the amount of views in one chapter means I actually
do have fans of my story, and they came back after knowing that I've started writinga again. Go me.
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I like this chapter a lot. This chapter definitely did go through a lot of drafts, but that's because there is
so much that is happening in it. I have a lot of the basic relationships that the main characters have with each
other written in my notes, as well as secondary characters that affect their backstory, but I don't have all the
details. It was great seeing all of come to light as I was writing.
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I like how this chapter was able to tell so much about both characters. Gwendolyne didn't get much development,
she didn't get none either, and this certainly has been her most telling chapter as well. I think I was able to
balance the three charcters throughout the chapter well enough that you don't forget who's there.
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My first draft of the chapter left out Stark's personal backstory, and had him ending with the paragraph about
tithing. That wasn't working at all as an ending. Ending with a rationalization of how the holy mages and
paladins interact is the exact wrong way to end a chapter following Melfina's tale. At this point, I was going
to rearrange the chapter so it ended with Melfina, as that is the strongest part of the chapter emotionally.
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While rearranging the chapter structure was an option, I kept on thinking on how still end with Stark. There are
too many chapters where Stark gets a Point of View, yet the chapter is really more about Melfina. Stark needs
his time as well. Figuring out a way to close with Stark was a good way to still give his time to shine even
though Melfina took up the bulk of the chapter. The only way to do this was to have him say something
emotionally relevant as well, so eventually I came to the conclusion that this was the time to also reveal some
of Stark's backstory as well.
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01/14/2009 - Rewrite to version 1.30. Small tweaks to make it flow better
and some minor typos. A net change of 0 words to 1,970.
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07/19/2009 - Rewrite to version 1.80. Did a lot of cleaning up of some pretty
bad paragraphs. A net change of -32 words to 1,938.
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