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November 27, 2006
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Gamblor was originally supposed to exit at the end of this chapter. I don't really know how it happened but he
just ended up going upstairs instead.
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I didn't think of alternating points of view until Chapter IV, but alternating defintely helped with this chapter.
Making the entire story take place in one location instead of the more typical journey that heroes go on makes it a
challenge to think up ways of inserting action. Stark's unfamiliarity with West Luna is something to be taken
advantage of at this point. But that won't last long. I'll think of something.
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07-23-2009 - I didn't start recording my revisions until after I was into Volume 2, so I'm guessing a new default
starting point for all Volume 1 chapters to be at 1.50. Rewrite to version 1.80.
Quite a few ugly paragraphs cleaned up. A net change of +22 words to 1,455.
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